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October 20, 2010 / Gio

Shattered Sheets

Your mattress is an ocean of drowning relationships
Full of false intentions and new positions.
I leave you here to stare at your own shattered sheets.

 

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  1. Pat Cegan / Nov 14 2010 4:33 am

    So few words, so many truths. Your poem stopped me in my tracks and brought me back to your blog three times!

    I once saw a movie where a woman broke up with her lover. She said, “I cried for three days, my heart broken. Then I cried for three more days because, if I were honest with myself, I really don´t care that he left.” I never forgot that line. We so often think something that happened is so important and yet, in a very short time, don´t remember it or don´t care anymore.

    I am definitely going to explore your poetry more. I am new to the world of poetry and feel I have been given a huge gift. It takes me right to the inner dimension where my reality exists these days. Thanks! pat

    http://www.patcegan.wordpress.com

  2. Jingle / Oct 31 2010 9:50 pm

    this is amazing,
    wow.
    powerful imagery.

  3. notjeffery / Oct 31 2010 5:07 am

    This is a brilliant piece!
    I really loved reading it.
    What you have achieved in so few lines is astounding.
    WELL DONE!
    Peace to you,

  4. Artswebshow / Oct 27 2010 5:35 am

    Brilliant.
    Short is perfect for this one

  5. trisha / Oct 26 2010 2:19 pm

    very powerful.

  6. Marlee-I Mystic / Oct 25 2010 5:55 pm

    I heard that! Very straight forward without being too blunt. I enjoy!

  7. Mama Zen / Oct 25 2010 1:52 pm

    Absolutely fantastic!

  8. signed .............bkm / Oct 25 2010 1:51 pm

    love the shattered shees – much more behind this story….nice….
    love your cheese plate too…that would be nice and a glass of wine while reading poetry….blessings..bkm

  9. Talon / Oct 25 2010 10:39 am

    Giovanni, all I can think is “wow!” Three lines that speak absolute volumes. I’m glad I’m not the one left behind to reflect upon “shattered sheets” – which is just a perfect image! (no pun intended)

  10. Carrie Burtt / Oct 25 2010 9:27 am

    I love this…very thought provoking and written eloquently! 🙂

  11. liv2write2day / Oct 25 2010 8:26 am

    So powerful, Gio–and sad. I think it’s amazing to be able to capture so much in so few words. True skill.

  12. Jamie Dedes / Oct 24 2010 11:29 pm

    Wow! That is simply and perfect. Well done.

  13. ms pie / Oct 24 2010 10:31 pm

    it is amazing how inanimate objects hold so many stories…. intimacy can be hard to walk away from… i like this story rainy curtain

  14. Giovanni / Oct 24 2010 10:25 pm

    Thanks Katherine! I’ll come visit you soon.

  15. Sarah / Oct 24 2010 10:07 pm

    wow…this is good.

  16. Katherine / Oct 24 2010 2:44 am

    So few words but the content tells an entire story! Very clever … loved the poetic simplicity of your Magpie!

  17. Claudia / Oct 23 2010 1:29 pm

    wow! strong words! i once had a relationship like this and it’s not easy to walk away..great write – you said a lot in this emotion filled peace with just a few words
    my magpie is up as well

  18. brian / Oct 23 2010 6:57 am

    wicked opening line….sets the rest up nicely though i wonder do they often see this in their own reflection….

  19. Jannie Funster / Oct 22 2010 6:40 pm

    Sounds like they need a life preserver in that bed.

    Very excellently well done, Gio!

  20. ana / Oct 22 2010 12:43 pm

    Wow. And in the end all that’s left is an empty bed! Love the title!

  21. SenderUpWords / Oct 22 2010 9:52 am

    Oooooooooooooooooooooooh. I am enthralled with this piece. ENTHRALLED. Love and Light, Sender

  22. Giovanni / Oct 21 2010 4:13 pm

    Thanks Lyn,
    You truly captured what I was going for…strength!
    Especially the fortitude to walk away from a bad relationship.

  23. Lyn / Oct 21 2010 3:52 pm

    It’s good to walk away..this gave me a sense of your strength..very good…

  24. Jingle / Oct 21 2010 2:58 pm

    mattress is an ocean,
    love the image there.
    divine piece.

  25. Susannah / Oct 21 2010 2:31 pm

    So much story and feeling packed into those three lines. Nice Magpie!

    My Magpie

  26. Kathe W. / Oct 21 2010 1:02 pm

    well done! I like this!

  27. Foxy / Oct 21 2010 7:29 am

    OUCH! Very compact ,bitter too,defensive,,,strong wording : beautiful poem!

  28. Priyanka Bhowmick / Oct 21 2010 12:59 am

    a feeling of dejection. beautifully written within a few words.

  29. jaime / Oct 20 2010 10:57 pm

    short and powerful. nicely done.

  30. Kimberla / Oct 20 2010 6:57 pm

    Among the drowning relationships, I hope and search for lifeboat…

  31. Terresa Wellborn / Oct 20 2010 6:42 pm

    Nothing like drowning relationships, having been there, this resonates.

    And the alliteration of shattered sheets…love that, completely.

  32. Reflections / Oct 20 2010 5:09 pm

    Great comparisons to relationships, succinct, but thought out well.

  33. Rene Foran / Oct 20 2010 3:58 pm

    that’s right..hang ’em out to dry, buddy 🙂

  34. Rebecca / Oct 20 2010 3:34 pm

    Wow. My emotions ran through me like a freight train on a hot summer’s day, reading this. The connection between the sheets and relationships in beautiful, yet sinful and dark. Your use of words amazes me… as well as your grammar and spelling. In fact, this reminds me… change the sheets.

  35. Walnut and Pearl / Oct 20 2010 2:43 pm

    Most excellent. Every word is needed, every word is the right word. Bitter but restrained. Most excellent.

  36. jinksy / Oct 20 2010 10:14 am

    Cor! Tell it like it is, why don’t you? LOL 🙂

  37. Gabriela Abalo / Oct 20 2010 10:14 am

    Wow! I totally love it!!

    great one 🙂

  38. Tammy McLeod / Oct 20 2010 9:06 am

    I enjoy writers who don’t overuse words. You haven’t. First visit to your poetry Gio and it certainly rivals your food. Great talent.

  39. Jane Teahen-Jones / Oct 20 2010 8:49 am

    Dear Giovanni: It is always important to reflect upon those “shattered sheets”. Very deep and meaningful. Thank-you!

  40. buttercup600 / Oct 20 2010 3:12 am

    Succinct and sooooooooo powerful my friend. Well said, I loved it xxx

  41. nimaruichi / Oct 20 2010 3:03 am

    Good play on words & meaning; nicely done

  42. Deborah / Oct 20 2010 2:59 am

    Three lines each laden with meaning … just brilliant!

  43. veenzpotter / Oct 20 2010 2:58 am

    its really good…..(good things come in small packages you have shown)

  44. Peaceful Pandemonium / Oct 20 2010 1:05 am

    Short, but very powerful. It takes real talent to fit so much into so few words.

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